A tired stretch of asphalt, outside of time
finds itself peppered with glossy machines,
sleek, moving fast,
their owner’s hearts turned to stone.
The needle strewn forest path, outside of time
bears witness to the solitary soul
seeking solace and pure oxygen
as the embers of a lost world fall all around.
An ancient wave cleaved by fin and tail, outside of time
blesses the ion shore,
where a young woman clad in dark denim
determinedly walks deeper into frigid waters,
as we safe on land start the long chain of phone calls,
saving one life and in turn, our own.
The blue sky above eternally watches over a billion worlds,
worlds that never stop spinning and are forever changing,
waiting patiently for us to return home, outside of time.
Your choice of words create such picturesque images, that captures a moment in time that you’re so lucky to catch a glimpse of. I liked the way you added “outside of time” on certain sentences. I went back to re-read your poem and for fun strung those four sentences together. Even those painted a visually different picture in my head. Thanks for sharing Kimberlee!
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Wow, I’ve never had someone read my work in this way before – thank you for sharing this and for always leaving such lovely feedback, I’m forever blessed!
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As always Kim..you amazed me with your gift of creating beautiful images through your words…this is again one of your works which is really visually stunning..
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When I posted this piece, I was unsure if what was in my head would translate well, your comments are a joy to read, Mich! I’m so blessed to have you read my words…
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Oh Kim, you have such deepness in you. You describe so well what you feel. Your words are exquisite. I wish I could write like you. I do feel that I live ” outside of time ” outside of reality. Those words made me really think. Thank you dear friend for another lovely note. So lucky to have you as a neighbour..😘❤️
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I think living “outside of time” will be the equalizer for all of us, I love it when I’m in the flow and time falls away, it’s a delicious feeling! Thank you (always!) for your unwavering support, it means a lot!!
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Yes, floating outside of time, outside of reality is such a great sensation…feeling alive, dreaming. Now trying more to be realistic. Not sure that I like this. Ha ha ha. It is not me.
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THANKS KIM, MOM LOVES THIS
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This poem was sparked by a walk down Robson St., I noticed a whole row of high-end cars and thought about how different the owner’s worlds are from mine! I’m glad you love this…XO
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LOVE this! You captured these beautiful moments with such descriptive words – I felt that I was witnessing something magical each time. Thank you for a wonderful poem.
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Hi, there! Thank you so much for popping by & leaving such wonderful words, I’m so glad you enjoyed this piece, it warms my heart!
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You create a beautiful imagery with your words, Kim. Loved the beauty of the expressions you portray and the picture your creativity wishes to paint.
Wishing you a very good day, Kim!
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It’s always a good day when I come across your words, thank you so much, it means a lot!
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My pleasure, Kim.
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This poem has a lot of depth and layers to it. It’s a delight to read!
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So glad to read your lovely words, thank you for stopping by and having a read, you’ve made my day!
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How beautiful to read!
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Thank you for stopping by & leaving such a lovely comment, it warms this poet’s heart!
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No problem! 🙂
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Ah, gorgeous and filled with longing beneath a surface riddled with distraction.
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Thank you so much for stopping by and leaving such a poetic response, how lovely to have these words on my page!
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Beautiful writing, so well-deserved 🙂
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I’m so touched…your words are like stars to me, twinkling among my pages, thank you so much!
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Kim, I especially liked this these lines, “The blue sky above eternally watches over a billion worlds,
worlds that never stop spinning and are forever changing,” This feels comforting to me.
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Thank you so much for stopping by and sharing your thoughts, I’m glad you found some comfort in my words, it means a lot!
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Love your writing! Have a read of mine please if you get the chance id love your feedback 🙂
https://weenotions.wordpress.com/2017/09/02/doom-gloom/
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Hi, there! Thank you for stopping by & commenting, I really appreciate it! I will try to pop by soon…
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